今天

今天我很累。
jintian wo hen lei.
Today I'm very tired.


整天睡， 现在有好多.睡了一整天，现在好多了(words ok,but grammer this more proper)
zheng tian shui, xian zai you hau duo. ---shui le yi zheng tian,xian zai hao duo le
Slept the whole day, now I feel better.


看到老师改正我的错误， 觉的真羞。--replace this word>>有点羞 (words ok,but this lighter.)
kan dao laoshi gai zheng wo de cuo wu, jue de zhen xiu. --
Seeing all the mistakes my teacher has to correct, I feel a bit of embarrassed.


我知道我有很多东西还要进步。 ---必需( have to)more proper
wo zhidao wo you hen duo dongxi hai yao jinbu. ---bi xu
I know I have a lot of things I still need to improve.


我会(----)！ >>>我一定可以的
wo hui (......) -----try this>> wo yi ding ke yi de
I will work hard!----surely i can do it.


大致上还好,只是文法，有些字把它给换了，那就行了
da zhi shang hai hao,zhi shi wen fa,you xie zhi ba ta gei huan le,na jiu xing le.
over all is ok, only grammer , some of the words just change, then it will be alright.